YoYoExpert - Official Contest - #1

General Yo-Yo
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Buddha’s Revenge is kind of like, has quite a few of the moves and the feel in it.

Starts out like this, oh actually, starts out with a Trapeez (that’s the middle of the trick).

Starts on the Trapeez, you shoot up, you cross your hands, you shoot down, and you shoot into Trapeez.

Starts with a Trapeez, to do the first part is a little tricky, this takes practice.

What you do is you pop the Yo-Yo in the air like so, pops it straight up and you bring your throw hand straight across into it.

Practice that once you get there it’s kind of a similar motion to Loser’s Binge you actually roll it you are going to roll the yo yo over your fingers but as you do so you uncross and recross your hands in one motion so it looks like this.

Bring it across and do your roll so it’s uncrossing and recrossing your hands and then I pop it up and bring your left non throw hand pointer finger directly underneath the yo yo just like so it should land in a double nothing.

CORRECTIONS:

It’s kind of like Buddha’s Revenge, has quite a few of the moves and the feel in it.

It starts out like this, oh actually, it starts out with a Trapeze (that’s the middle of the trick).

It starts with a Trapeze, you shoot up, you cross your hands, you shoot down, and you shoot into Trapeze.

It starts with a Trapeze, to do the first part is a little tricky, this takes practice.

What you do is you pop the Yo-Yo in the air like so, once you pop it straight up then you bring your throw hand straight across into it.

Practice that once you get there it’s kind of a similar motion to Loser’s Binge, you actually roll it. You are going to roll the yo yo over your fingers, but as you do so you uncross and recross your hands in one motion so it looks like this.

Bring it across and do your roll so it’s uncrossing and recrossing your hands and then pop it up and bring your left non-throw hand pointer finger directly underneath the yo yo just like so. It should land in a double nothing.

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Jawad has 16 entries. He made corrections on 16 different videos

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In yo-yoing there are different styles of play, when you see people on tricks.

This involves pinching the string, throwing it, maneuvering it.

Its simple elements but very impressive.

It lands you in kind of a backwards trapeze and that?s when you roll out of that.

So I roll it and the throw hand actually comes over like so.

So watch. It rolls and the throw hand follows it around and lands in a trapeze.

Practice that and you’ll be impressing.

CORRECTIONS:

In yo-yoing there are different styles of play, when you see people doing tricks.

This involves pinching the string, throwing it, and maneuvering it.

It has simple elements but it’s very impressive.

It lands you in kind of a backwards trapeze and thats when you roll out of that.

So I roll it and my throw hand actually comes over like so.

So watch, it rolls and my throw hand follows it around and lands in a trapeze.

Practice that and you’ll be impressing people.

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I’ll have more up later. My eyes hurt from reading and checking all that lol. :stuck_out_tongue: :frowning:

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http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/004-advanced-leg-wrap-trap.html
in the sectance “pepole are going to think you?re a yoyo pro” there should not be a “?” mark in you’re

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Corrections
i don’t know–whatnot.
I don’t know Diabolo.

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Corrections
there is repeating “it’s a cool trick” at the beginning and atfer he shows you it.
also there is a you?re which is incorrect it goes like you’re

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corrections
Kwijibo is spelled like kwyjbo twice
also the part “a and crossing your throw hand” should not have the a and in it it should just be a “and”
and there is three you?re instead of you’re

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http://yoyoexpert.com/learn/064-expert-wrist-mount
corections
“forming” looks like this: “forming?” when it should look like this: forming. this was used in the sentence:" this triangle that’s forming.
also there is this: “get out of a wrist mount,–” when it should not be like this, it should be just the comma.
“let me show you from this angle really quickly,–” again.

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If I had to pick one trick out of all the tricks I’m going to teach you guys I had to call my all time favorite

If I had to pick one trick out of all the tricks I’m going to teach you guys that I had to call my all time favorite.

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Next thing, this is advanced part two. We’re going to deal with something called Grinding. It’s cool looking. It involves getting…

Next thing, this is advanced part two. We’re going to deal with something called Grinding. It’s cool looking. Involves getting…

You never said it

Also, the same video:

There are lots of different moves.

There’s lots of different moves.

You never said are.

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So when you throw its kind of going back to the sleeper it sounds kind of silly for me to go back to that trick but practice your sleeper.

The second one was incorrect. Also, on the same video, here:

You want it to be able to land on string without shooting back at your hand it’s really important.

You want it to be able to land the string without it shooting back to your hand, it’s really important.

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Here is what it said: In yo-yoing there are different styles of play, when you see people on tricks.
Here is what you said: In yo-yoing there’s different styles of play, when you see people on tricks.

Here is what it said: Pretend you have a little rock in your hand your actually going to take that rock and like just throw it over and notice how the string kind of floated over like that.

Here is the correction: Pretend you have like a little rock in your hand. You’re actually going to take that rock and like just throw it over and notice how the string kind of floated over like that.

Also, I have a question. We are supposed to be matching what you are saying right? Cause I have noticed on some replies, that some words are changed from what you said anyway, so…yeah. Please answer back

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Maintenance- Yo-Yo type

1.So in yo-yoing today, you basically got two different shapes and three different types of yo-yo’s.
Correction:
So, in yo-yoing today, you basically have to different shapes and three different types of yo-yo’s.
2. The two shapes, which we’ve touched on before, is imperial® shaped, where it’s kind of rounded.
correction
The two shapes, which we’ve touched on before, are imperial® shaped, where the yo-yo is kind of rounded
3.So two different shapes. You got butterfly and imperial®.
Correction:
So, you’ve got two different shapes, butterfly and imperial®.
4.Then you have three basic types of yo-yo’s.
Correction:
Then, you have three basic types of yo-yo’s.
5.When they say it’s not like the yo-yo I used to use, that’s because this is what they were using.
Correction:
When your grandfathers say “it’s not like the yo-yo I used to use,” that’s because this is what your grandfathers were using.
6. It’s basically-- this one even has a metal axle. A lot of the older ones were wood.
Correction:
This one even has a metal axle, a lot of the older ones were wood.
7. And so basically, it was spinning right around that.
Correction:
And so basically, the string was spinning right around that axle.
8. You’ve got a little plastic piece. It goes over the metal there.
Correction:
You’ve got a little plastic piece that goes over the metal axle.
9. The string goes on that and makes it spin.
Correction
The string goes on the transaxle and makes the yo-yo spin.
10. This one, the string goes around the bearing. And this helps keep that yo-yo spinning
Correction:
The string goes around the bearing and this bearing helps keep that yo-yo spinning
11. There’s lots of improvements in yo-yoing. And this is mainly why all the tricks you see today are because of ball bearings.
Correction:
There are many improvements in yo-yoing. Almost all the tricks you see today are because of ball bearings.
12. That’s the three basic types. We’re going to get into the more specifics about them next.
Corrections
Those are the three basic types. We’re going to get more specific about them next.

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Part 1, here is what the text said: You want to try and do this in one fluent movement, so I’m going to show you real quick what I mean by that.

Here is what you said: You want to try and do this in one fluent movement, so let me show you real quick what I mean by that.

Part 3, here is what the text said: I highly suggest watching each part a couple of times,
Here is what you said: I highly suggest watching each part a couple times,

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Corrections:

  1. The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

You wanna put it the string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

  1. The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your knuckle and your fingernail just like so.

The string goes around your middle finger and it goes in between your two knuckles there, in between your nuckle and your fingernail just like so.

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Original: Okay, next trick is man on the flying trapeze.
Correction: Okay, next trick is the Man on the Flying Trapeze.

Original: A lot of people call this just trapeze abbreviated, it’s pretty cool.
Correction: A lot of people call this just Trapeze abbreviated. It’s pretty cool

Original: The trick itself is another trick where you want to practice.
Correction: The trick itself is another trick where you want to practice.

Original: You want this strong because a lot of the tricks we’re going to be working on I’m just going to say you do a trapeze, so you have to know it.
Correction: You want to get this strong, because a lot of the tricks we’re going to be working on I’m just going to say, “You do a Trapeze.” So, you have to know it.

Original: What you do is you start with a breakaway.
Correction: What you do is you start with a Breakaway.

Original: Then just get it back to your hand.
Correction: And then you just get it back to your hand.

Original: That’s called man on the flying trapeze.
Correction: That’s called Man on the Flying Trapeze.

Original: What you want to do is you throw a strong breakaway like so and instead of catching it when it’s at your shoulder, take your non-throw hand, bring your pointer finger out.
Correction: What you want to do is you throw a strong Breakaway like so, and instead of catching it when it’s at your shoulder, take your non-throw hand. Bring your pointer finger out.

Original: The yo-yo is going to go under your pointer finger.
Correction: And the yo-yo is going to go under your pointer finger.

Original: It’s going to shoot around it and that’s what brings is onto the string.
Correction: It’s going to shoot around it and that’s what brings it onto the string itself.

Original: As it’s coming across, you bring your pointer as close to the yo-yo as possible.
Correction: And as it’s coming across, you bring your pointer as close to the yo-yo as possible.

Original: It’s really impressive.
Correction: I mean it’s really impressive.

Original: From there, the yo-yo is actually going to shoot down into your hand.
Correction: And from there, the yo-yo is actually going to shoot down into your hand.

Original: You want to pop it up and then have your hand open underneath.
Correction: So you want to pop it up and then have your hand open underneath.

Original: It’s something you can work on.
Correction: It’s something that you can work on.

Original: That’s man flying the trapeze.
Correction: And that’s Man on the Flying Trapeze.

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PART 1
Here is what the text said: If you can get it down fast and smooth you can really impress people.

Here is the correction: If you can get it down fast and smooth it’s gonna really impress people

Here is what the text said: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string hair.

here is the correction: You want to take your throw hand and turn it in towards yourself like that and then you push in on the string here.

Text: Let’s try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. One more time then we’re going to break down the next part in the next segment.

Correction: Let’s try this again. So you take it, push in, come double around, come back around, double up on the other side. M’Kay. One more time then we’re going to break down the next part in the next segment.

PART 2

Text: So we’ve gone this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we are here.

Correction: So we’ve gotten this far. We hit the string, we went under, doubled up and brought it back and we’re here.

Text: The next step isn’t too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and undoing that

Correction: The next step isn’t too bad. You are actually just missing once and bringing it back over like so and then undoing that

text: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

correction: So what you want to do is get up to this point with me, over here and from here what you are going to do is unwrap that part and you are going to swing it around your non-throw hand point a.

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corrections:
it’s really cool-looking
it’s really cool looking
a coulple of times “Revolutions” is not capitalized (not sure if this is correct are not but at the end it is capitalized.)

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corrections:
the tenses are wrong and keep changing (the real key…)
“shoot” is in the wrong tense
after “throw” all you need is a comma
“coming” is the wrong tense
“and that’s volcano” at the end is a fragment
the second sentence needs a point of reference (for example “one” could be changed to the word trick)
the sentence “what it looks like is this” is a fragment