ive seen this in many tricks and i think your trick brings it up again. ther are two many parts of the trick where the yoyo is not on a string and is just dangling. Then you fling it back up onto the string. There is nothing wrong with it but it takes a smooth atmosphere away from the entire trick. You should probably find a way for a smoother transit to occur from string to string. Just some constructive criticism :). I did think that the foundation of the trick was very nice, though and there were some great trick elements in there.