# are my info ok on jensen kimmit ? **URL:** \ **Category:** General Yo-Yo\ **Created:** [October 15, 2014, 10:42pm UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144 "2014-10-15T22:42:29Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 11\ **Page:** 2
**Author:** ![vegabomb](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/vegabomb/32/199_2.png) [@vegabomb](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/vegabomb)\ **Post date:** [October 17, 2014, 4:08am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/21 "2014-10-17T04:08:34Z")
From the forum rules… > [@YoYoExpert Forum Rules](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/yoyoexpert-forum-rules/43/1): > > New rule update. (6/9/2013) > Please use the English language in your posts here so we know what you are asking about or saying. We can’t help you if we don’t understand your posts. ---
**Author:** ![Yoyo](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/y/41988e/32.png) [@Yoyo](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/Yoyo)\ **Post date:** [October 18, 2014, 12:49am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/22 "2014-10-18T00:49:46Z")
> [@vegabomb](#): > > From the forum rules… Je m’excuse 😛 ---
**Author:** ![Grinch](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/grinch/32/1515_2.png) [@Grinch](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/Grinch)\ **Post date:** [October 19, 2014, 9:14am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/23 "2014-10-19T09:14:46Z")
> [@abby1371](#): > > looks good to me but, your grammar and spelling not so much so I revised it for you. > > Jensen Kimmitt is a Canadian yoyoer from Edmonton, he is best known for his well-choreographed, high-scoring style. Jensen was formerly a member of the Caribou Lodge Yo-Yo Works (CLYW) team but, in 2010 he decided to switch to the YoYoFactory (YYF) contest team for financial reasons.Then in 2011 he decided to come back to CLYW to be with his friends. During his career he had 3 different pro models, 2 with CLYW and 1 with YYF the first one was with CLYW it was called the Wooly Marmot and it released in 2009. His second pro model was called the Northstar, this Yoyo is based on the Yoyo the protostar but the difference is it’s a heavier yoyo. Jensen used this Yoyo to win many contests. The Northstar was released in 2010. After this Jensen then came back to the CLYW team. Jensen’s 3rd pro model was called the canvas which, was released in 2011. He used this Yoyo to win lots of titles. In 2009 Jensen won 1st place in the 44clash contest, 1st Pacific Northwest Regionals, and 1st in the Bay Area Classic. In 2010 he won plenty of contests but, the best thing he could ever hoped happened,he won the 2010 World YoYo Contest! After that he only placed 8th or 9th place. Then Jensen decided to concentrate more on videos and other stuff. > > Alright here’s what I fixed and why > > If you are going to use a company’s abbreviation you need it in brackets next to the name. > > Also reason is now reasons because you never went into detail why. > > also model became models because there is more than 1 > > “winned” isn’t a word in English we use won if we use past tense > > “alot” isn’t a word it’s a lot or allot which have 2 different meanings > > Allot- means to share or divide > A lot- means plenty > > Never start a sentence with and it will. Automatically make it a sentence fragment. > > Heavyier is now heavier you don’t need the y in english a tip is if you see -ier you drop the y. > > The ! Is now at the end of the world Yoyo contest because it’s exciting and important. > > Also if your going to make a sentence with a list before the last thing on the list you need a ,and\_\_\_\_\_ > > Also its now videos instead of video because Jensen made more than 1 video > > Also if your going to use any of these words in the middle of a sentence > For > And > But > Or > Yet > So > You need a , after them. > > If you have anymore questions lemme know! > > EDIT: can someone who speaks french translate this to him? Cause if he has problems with english I think I just made it harder for him to understand… > > Also dude your rocking this language if this is a secondary language! If you were in the USA you would be writing at what we call a 2nd or 3rd grade level. awww,such a helpful lil lady,very nice of you to take the time to do thatb for him. and its kinda easy to tell you have good grades in english class XD ---
**Author:** ![Yoyo](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/y/41988e/32.png) [@Yoyo](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/Yoyo)\ **Post date:** [October 19, 2014, 11:38am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/24 "2014-10-19T11:38:26Z")
It is? ---
**Author:** ![TheGrelots](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/thegrelots/32/1572_2.png) [@TheGrelots](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/TheGrelots)\ **Post date:** [October 19, 2014, 12:17pm UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/25 "2014-10-19T12:17:17Z")
Finaly , it wont be usefull, she wants something really simple like how do he look like and what is his job/occupation in simple sentence so i’m kinda sorry for those who took the time to search for all the mistakes (i’m pretty much pointing abby there ^^) ---
**Author:** ![StillinKansasCity](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/stillinkansascity/32/848_2.png) [@StillinKansasCity](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/StillinKansasCity)\ **Post date:** [October 19, 2014, 4:55pm UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/26 "2014-10-19T16:55:34Z")
Part of the excitement of writing is to work through the errors on your your own. I learned nothing from having people do the heavy lifting for me. ---
**Author:** ![northstarrocks](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/n/839c29/32.png) [@northstarrocks](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/northstarrocks)\ **Post date:** [October 29, 2014, 12:56am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/27 "2014-10-29T00:56:09Z")
> [@Zorro](#): > > I see know false info, but I am not a Jensen Kimmit follower. However, I did notice some grammatical mistakes. I don’t know whether or not I should not them or not though. Pot calling the kettle black if you ask me. “I see know false info.” ---
**Author:** ![abby1371](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/abby1371/32/1075_2.png) [@abby1371](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/abby1371)\ **Post date:** [October 29, 2014, 10:27am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/28 "2014-10-29T10:27:31Z")
> [@northstarrocks](#): > > Pot calling the kettle black if you ask me. > > “I see know false info.” that was auto correct I hate it. ---
**Author:** ![Yoyo](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/y/41988e/32.png) [@Yoyo](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/Yoyo)\ **Post date:** [October 29, 2014, 11:56am UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/29 "2014-10-29T11:56:35Z")
> [@abby1371](#): > > that was auto correct I hate it. Look over your post before sending. ---
**Author:** ![northstarrocks](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/n/839c29/32.png) [@northstarrocks](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/northstarrocks)\ **Post date:** [October 30, 2014, 11:11pm UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/30 "2014-10-30T23:11:30Z")
> [@abby1371](#): > > that was auto correct I hate it. Wait… I didn’t quote you though. I was referring to Zorro’s post. ---
**Author:** ![abby1371](https://sea1.discourse-cdn.com/flex015/user_avatar/forums.yoyoexpert.com/abby1371/32/1075_2.png) [@abby1371](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/u/abby1371)\ **Post date:** [October 30, 2014, 11:46pm UTC](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144/31 "2014-10-30T23:46:31Z")
> [@northstarrocks](#): > > Wait… I didn’t quote you though. I was referring to Zorro’s post. ooh oops. [Previous page](https://forums.yoyoexpert.com/t/are-my-info-ok-on-jensen-kimmit/70144.md?page=1)